revision for the paper

can you please fix all the points that she indicates using BLUE

“You’ve covered all of the evidence that you need for the paper. Now you need to make sure that every paragraph has an idea that relates to your bigger idea about rest, being indoors, our imperfections and COVID-19.” this is the bigger suggestion that you need to make sure each paragraph have, and there are some changes need in the word.

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